"Simmering" by Raud A. Kennedy

[mexcine.livejournal.com]

 

Frustration simmers like

The chili on the stove.

Another birthday days away

And still living in an apartment

Where the floor slants

Like the deck of a ship in a storm.

Self made barriers lay in my way.

Laziness, depression, addiction.

With luck, I’ll boil over.

Comments

[alwaysashipper.livejournal.com]

This is great, thanks for posting.

[mspixieears.livejournal.com]

Woah, awfully cliched similes. The first one is forgivable but the second one is just terrible. This just doesn't strike me as a successful poem.