verb pilots the plane

[wicked-sassy.livejournal.com]

"Tonight No Poetry Will Serve"
by Adrienne Rich

Saw you walking barefoot
taking a long look
at the new moon's eyelid

later spread
sleep-fallen, naked in your dark hair
asleep but not oblivious
of the unslept unsleeping
elsewhere

Tonight I think
no poetry
will serve

Syntax of rendition:

verb pilots the plane
adverb modifies action

verb force-feeds noun
submerges the subject
noun is choking
verb disgraced goes on doing

now diagram the sentence

Comments

[evilstorm.livejournal.com]

I feel like I just read two poems in one. O_o

[two-grey-rooms.livejournal.com]

auuuuuugh rich <333333.

[shinygobonkers.livejournal.com]

syntax of rendition...so much awesome it is filled with :d

[jesuslovesbono.livejournal.com]

"the new moon's eyelid"

it is, isn't it.