[identity profile] ghostofchance.livejournal.com posting in [community profile] greatpoetry
Variation On The Word Sleep

I would like to watch you sleeping,
which may not happen.
I would like to watch you,
sleeping. I would like to sleep
with you, to enter
your sleep as its smooth dark wave
slides over my head

and walk with you through that lucent
wavering forest of bluegreen leaves
with its watery sun & three moons
towards the cave where you must descend,
towards your worst fear

I would like to give you the silver
branch, the small white flower, the one
word that will protect you
from the grief at the center
of your dream, from the grief
at the center I would like to follow
you up the long stairway
again & become
the boat that would row you back
carefully, a flame
in two cupped hands
to where your body lies
beside me, and as you enter
it as easily as breathing in

I would like to be the air
that inhabits you for a moment
only. I would like to be that unnoticed
& that necessary.

Date: 2004-08-12 06:11 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] timiathan.livejournal.com
oh i love that poem so much.

Date: 2004-08-12 06:55 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] timiathan.livejournal.com
well as long as you're not reading it while operating heavy machinery:)

Date: 2004-08-12 06:41 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] arcanefruition.livejournal.com
I love it, too.

I've seen a version with the second line deleted. Is this version the right one?

Date: 2004-08-12 08:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] iamkatia.livejournal.com

ahhh, that was lovely....

Date: 2004-08-12 08:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] agata.livejournal.com
Thanks for that. Just lovely.

Date: 2004-08-13 01:23 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bitter-phoenix.livejournal.com
I love the poem, I think what makes this poem so unique for me is the allusiveness and the total aloofness of the narrator. It's very silky-if you know what I mean, lol...I'm terrible for just saying how I think, instead of what I mean.

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